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The Love for the Nation

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・丰.习作点评・ ・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・ ・ For long have we struggle for the prosperity of the country we belong to;for long have we cherish the spectacular images of the nation we love:HeP mountains snake through vast land to the infinity; her rivers smooth across north and south breeding people for generations;her sky is ignited by the passion of SUn and the tranquility of the moon;her plains stretches out to the margin of ocean.Never in one single place on earth have l de— voted my love more than to this great nation. The Chinese were never known to live in a slavish state with ioy and contend .With the coming of a new age,ushered in the beginning of a new nation,breaking the fetter of feudalism and inequality,lifting people out of poverty and torture of the war.。The love for the nation is everlasting。since this country was established,We love our nation because we understand our ancestors’endeavor for freedom,we respect their nobility and upright nature,and we admire their brevity佃and creativity.The founding of this nation was based on altruistic sacrifice of the Chinese people.And the longing for freedom of these warriors shall reverberate in every hear. The love for the nation is overwhelming because we are proud of the success we have achieved,the respect we have earned,the fame we have received.With tremendous efforts.countless miracles have been created.We hold the truth in hand and strive for future. We have the faith of a greater country’ and you shall see that frOm our faces.We are optimistic for a better world,as always,and you will be impressed. 。 The love for the nation shall never vanish nor perish.And the future of this country is not only in the hands of statesman,but also in the hands of billions of unknowns.We may endure difficulties face challenges,trapped in dilemmas¨.But let it come,for the rising of this nation shall not be stopped.for we love this nation so deep. Simon’s CommenIs: This is a nicely written patriotic piece.It works well due to the good use of language and manages to praise China without criticizing Japan,which I have found to be unusual in Chinese students’writing.As this time there are no obvious groups of errors,I shall work through the errors in order. (1)is the present perfect,but it is written incorrectly--it should be“For long have we struggled”. This is true of(2).(3)should be“her”.(4)A colon is not a full stop or period.The famous American author Kurt Vonnegut recently said in art interview that writers should not use semi.colons--all 54 @◎00@ @匡响 06囝喃 维普资讯 http://www.cqvip.com

・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・ ・・丰.习作点评・丰. they show is that a writer has been to college.1 wholeheartedly agree。A comma is fine。(5)plains are plural,so plains“stretch”out to the oceans,not“stretches”.I am constantly amazed by this habitual elementary error.Please ensure you know the present simple.(6)The meaning of this sen— tence is unclear.Does the writer mean that they have only devoted their love to China or only devoted their love to something else in China? (7)Contend means argue or ifght.It seems that the writer means to say contentment-which means happiness.(8)The structure needs a subject-it should be “With the coming of a new age we have…”.(9)should be“The love for the nation has been everlast- ing since…”(10)Brevity means short.Does the author mean that he admires historical fiuresg for their ability to speak succinctly(简洁地)?(11)I am confused by this sentence.Firstly we strive for the future,and secondly,what does“We hold the truth in hand”mean?What particular truth is the author talking about?(1 2)Does the writer mean that the faith of the Chinese people makes China a greater country than others? Or does the writer mean that the faith of the Chinese people will make China a greater country than it is now?(1 3)This sentence is a little clumsy(笨拙的),with the phrase “as always”appearing to come as an afterthought.Best delete it.(14)should be“be trapped by dilemmas”.not“we may…trapped by dilemmas”. Ahhough 1 would not go as far as agreeing with the famous English comedian(喜剧作家)Spike Milligan’s comment that“If you’11 stand for the national anthem(国歌),you’11 stand for anything”, like most English people I am not used to expressing patriotism.Therefore I have decided to end the article by explaining why it is hard for me to write such a patriotic piece. This England By Simon Gilby Recently in the T/mes newspaper,an artic]e entitled“British,but not very proud”bemoaned(悲 叹,惋惜)the lack of patirotism amongst the nation’s youth.Why was it,the article despaired,that when British schoolchildren were asked to write an essay on why they are proud to be British,they found it hard to find a reason? It could well be argued that the main reason for this is that for a long time now,expressions of patirotism in Britain have had strong associtaions(联系)with the right(极端 右翼分子1 and 171 ̄o.Nazism(新纳粹主义).The main focus of this has been our disgraceful football hooligan(流氓) problem.Unfortunately most of the time a British person will see someone saying they are British and proud is usually a football hooligan tyring to justify why he beat up a foreign fan or joined in a r (暴 乱1 at a football tournament.The national flag is also often used by the National Front(民族阵线)and the British National Party(英国民族党),both neo-Nazi groups.They have used the lfag so often 1lOW that being seen waving the flag or hanging the flag from your window,when there isn’t a major sporting event taking place,would lead people to ̄/¥sU/T ̄(想当然地认为)you are a Nazi or Nazi sympathizer (同情者). The other reason is that the words most often used to describe patriotism have imperialist under— tortes(含意),both domestic and foreign.Nazi Germany often used words like mother and fatherland so @⑥00@⑨@匡响⑧06岛嗡 55 维普资讯 http://www.cqvip.com

・鼍.习作点评・鼍.・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・・ ・ British people tend to stay away from such words. Our imperial anthems such as Land 0, Hope and Glory and R ule Britannia,whilst celebrating British traditions,were written during the days of the British Empire,and therefore have a negative connotation(意义,含义)for many people.Even the national anthem is rarely sung in full in public.partly due to most people’S ignoran ̄e to the words past the] ̄rst verse(人多数人对第一段以后的内容都不知道),but also because one of the verses talks about crta ̄hing“rebellious Scots”(镇压“反叛的苏格兰人”1. Britain has yet to fully disentnagle(解开,清理)the vitrues that made US a force in the world from the effect that our former dominance of the globe had. Until that day comes.I feel patriotism in Britain will remain a knotty(棘手的)problem. 编者按:像平时一样。编者将李磊的作文送给Simon修改,井要求他律#常一样旺native English speaker的思维方式和写作习惯写一篇同一题材的范文供学生参考。但他却认为自己不适合写这 种文章,并写了上面这篇短文采“辩解”。从本栏目的角度看,Simon的文章似有“跑题”之嫌,但编 者却发现此文对中国学生有不容忽视的意义:我们认为最崇高、最有普遍价值的观念对不同文化 背最的人很可能会引起不同的联想和感受。这种现象在跨文化交流中值得注意 鳙读誊问.1. 亲爱的编辑老师: 我是责刊的忠实读者,每期的《大学英语》我都爱不释手,全部读完。我注意到从2006年第3 期开始,您们在目录页上标明了英语读物的难度。这也许对有些不看完整本杂志而只选看一部 分文章的同学有帮助,但我现在正准备考六级,您们标明A级(易,适合相当于高中及大学一年 级水平的读者)的读物对我来说是不是太简单了。我应该怎样处理这个问题? 福建读者刘军 刘军同学: 谢谢您的来信。您的问题提得很好,很有代表性。实际上,如果您了解我们分级的目的,就会 明白怎样处理这个问题了。我们考虑的主要是要帮助读者朋友选择恰当的阅读方式。本刊所标 的适合大一学生和相当于四级程度的文章,对准备考六级、考研的同学也同样很有帮助,因为您 在读这些文章时可以多注意表达方法、句型结构、词语搭配、篇章结构等。这些对写作、翻译都有 非常直接的好处。况且通过阅读本刊A、B级的文章还可学到很多语言以外的知识呢。还可以这 样考虑:我们学汉语的时候,是不是对读物有严格的难度分级 答案显然是否定的。要学好一种 语言,一定要广泛地阅读。 说到这里,我们再多说几句吧。对准备考四级的同学而言,难度标为C级的读物是不是不适 合,又造成浪费呢(7我们可以负责任地说:不会。因为我们在编辑时就考虑了程度低的读者,凡是 大一新生读起来可能有困难的地方都加了注释,有的还配了汉语译文,理解文章的意思不会有 多大的困难。 简言之,不管 什么程度的读者,正确的阅读方法应该是这样:对于难度大的文章争取读懂 意思;而阅读难度不大的文章时,除了读懂意思,还应该多注意作者是怎样表达的。只有这样将 难、易不同的文章结合起来阅读,才能最快、最有效地提高语言能力。这就是阅读的基本准则。 、 编者 5 6 @⑥00@ @匿响 06岛嗡 

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